[Two children, a little boy (Chase) and a little girl
(Kerstin), run around the bedroom frantically trying to get ready for bed so
their father can tell them a bedtime story. Their father tucks them in and
tells them a bedtime story every night. It is one of their traditions they do
as a family that has been going on for years.]
FATHER: Do you have your jammies on? Brush your teeth? Say
your prayers? Alright, get all in bed, and I will tuck you in. Now, is everyone
all ready for a bedtime story? I have a great one for tonight. You are going to
love it.
CHASE: What is it about tonight, Daddy?
KERSTIN: Is it about a beautiful princess? Or fairies from a
faraway land?
(Kerstin hugs her stuffed unicorn tightly as she dreams of
all the possible magical stories.)
CHASE: What about dinosaurs? Or brave knights fighting in
battle?
FATHER: (Settles in to a cozy chair in the corner of the
bedroom) Okay kids, tonight is about a goddess named Ganga.
CHASE and KERSTIN: Ooohhhhh!
FATHER: Now listen,
there once was a goddess named Ganga…
KERSTIN: You already said that, Daddy!
FATHER: Oh! I am so sorry!
Ganga was a beautiful goddess. Her eyes were as blue as a
perfect flowing river, her hair shined bright as the sea, and her face as
lovely as Natalie Portman.
KERSTIN: Who is that?
FATHER: Never mind.
So, one day the mighty King Shantanu was walking along the
river and saw the beautiful Ganga. King Shantanu instantly fell in love and
wanted her to be his bride. Ganga was very hesitant at first and was not quite
sure about King Shantanu. She had heard a lot about him. She heard about all
the wonderful things he had done for his people in the land, the great wars him
and his army won, but she knew the ways of powerful kings. Controlling and
cynical they can be but the thought of being a queen did not sound so bad to
the lovely Ganga.
So Ganga made a deal with the king. She told Shantanu that
if he would never lie to her then she would marry him. But, once King Shantanu
said one lie, she would leave him and return to the river never to return and
never to be disturbed by him again. King Shantanu agreed. He knew that it would
be a difficult task but loved Ganga so much that he knew he could do it.
KERSTIN: Daddy, I am glad that Mommy never made that deal
with you. You tell Mommy everyday that you will do the dishes.
Author’s Note: This story was a spin off of Ganga and King
Shantanu in the Mahabharata and something funny my little cousin said this
weekend. I love adding things that are going on in my life with the stories
that we are reading for the week.
Bibliography: Laura Gibbs, PDE Mahabharata, July 2009
Jordan I loved your story! It was so...cute!! I loved the descriptions you gave to Kerstin and Chase. I seriously said “awe” out loud when you described her hugging her unicorn tightly. You added a bit of comic relief into the story which was cool when the dad started reminiscing of Natalie Portman. Awesome job! This is the third story that I read of yours and I am so ready to read another.
ReplyDeleteJordan, this was a great read and I enjoyed the overall setup of your story. There was a great use of dialogue and I loved how the story jumped right into conversation. I myself have been trying to write more stories like this one of yours to give a different spin and view for the reader. I also enjoyed the comic relief that you threw in. Thanks for posting and I am looking forward to reading more of your stories in the future.
ReplyDelete-Tyler
Jordan,
ReplyDeleteYour story is humorous. “You already said that, Daddy!” I can imagine Kerstin as a little kid asking a lot of questions and pointing out errors. You inserted some funny dialogue in between your story that made the story lit up more. The connection between the family and the story that the father was telling made me laugh. Nice story! I had fun reading it. Thanks.